PROMISE

• Artist: x-DopeSwaqqa
• Description: Dis is a song I just finished writing it from my thoughts of music in my head last week Friday. I thoughts i can't right a song but i did & because of wat I am feeling & was dreaming abwt dis special person & I just can't stop dese feelings dat I am feeling inside of me whenever I heard his voice etc. So Please coment wid constructive coments & vote fairly!High ratings & nice coments r greatly apreciated. Low coments are stil accepted, but I would apreciate a reason why. Thanks for reading!
  
• Date: 12/18/2008
• Tags: promise

Ehhhey
Why is there sadness on your eyes?
Am I don't want to be with you
You don't noticed I have affection on you
I hope my voice you'll heard
Right now I'm no patience
While my heart is sad
I hope you will take care of it
And remember this one promise

Chorus
Promise I am not leaving you
Promise I will not leave you alone
Promise from now on you and me will be together
Eyhh..yeah

What is this I am feeling?
Am I fallen' falling in love with you oh...
When I am with you what happiness
I hope you be trusted
If the feeling you have is true
I have something you need to know
My heart is yours
So don't break this promise

Chorus
Promise I am not leaving you
Promise I will not leave you alone
Promise you will never be alone
Promise from now on you and me...

Chorus
Promise I am not leaving you ohhh...
Promise I will not leave you alone
Promise from now on you and me...
Will be together....
Promised
Promised

Comments

[flutist_of_fury]

this song is really cool. not the best i've ever heard, but nice.

[flutist_of_fury]

cool!

[XxxBananasxxX]

i heart it
i dont have any real words to say... but that was amazing

[x-DopeSwaqqa]

ANd uhmm philelectricguitar your actually right about ur comment, i know that there was a convention mistakes in the verses but i can't changes it because you can't change it at all. But thanks anyway!!

[x-DopeSwaqqa]

philelectricguitar thank you 4 ur comment really!! It actually helps me u know ^__^ Peace wid you~~~

[x-DopeSwaqqa]

Thank you everyone who commented and who rated this poem 5 out of 5 i really appreaciated it....And 4 those people who just commented and didn't even rate it, please rate it as soon as possible thank u!!![>_<]I wish everyone have a safe and great holidays and Merry Christmas and a happy New Year everyone and i'm wishing myself a lot too, specially this year...

[philelectricguitar]

Well, the chorus is really good! There's quite a few convention mistakes, though, in the verses, that you might want to change. Still, a really cool song. 5/5