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Her love for him was debilitating
It allowed her not sleep nor appetite
When she lay her head down to sleep, a bed of roses cradled her dreams
Her love was all encompassing, all absorbing
She dozed softly in the clouds
Her heart beat its deepest content in every touch
Exulted in every kiss
Her senses exploded in a wonderful array of color
The world blurred and then a wonderful clarity would transpire
She could not recognize the changes occurring
It was a thief-- stealing away all other thoughts not about him
Stealing, stealing, until all that was left were the murmurs of her heart’s love for him
Nothing else remained
Nor could her mind maintain
Thoughts buried elsewhere,
Seemed a treasure to her lonely mind
Of something she was not allowed to partake
The wall she had constructed for the two of them was resolute in hiding them from all the world
Ensconcing them similarly to that ancient structure of Chinese design
She had emptied her life of everything but him, what else could she need?
Their love had planted the seed
Of what would later become her discontent.
- by SweetSunshineGoddess |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 12/11/2008 |
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- Title: Debilitating Love
- Artist: SweetSunshineGoddess
- Description: I wrote this in response to how some girls see life when they have a boyfriend. Its not me, but I see it so often I wanted to write about how tragic it can be. This was pretty random. Please be honest in what you think.
- Date: 12/11/2008
- Tags: debilitating love
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Comments (4 Comments)
- ~Shadey Sam~ - 02/02/2009
- Very nice, I've seen it too. yah a rhyme scheme would be good like Prince said but otherwise it's really good. Keep up the good work.
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- SweetSunshineGoddess - 12/22/2008
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Awesomd! Thanks for the feedback guys!
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- PrinceAgbe - 12/16/2008
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Strong and nice... For someone who hasnt felt that pain before you did excellent at explaining it...
The one thing i think could make it better would be a rhyme scheme, but that depends on if u want to rhyme in your poems or not...
Besides that its flawless... - Report As Spam
- ZakuraWolfe - 12/11/2008
- This has alot of feeling in it. 5/5
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