The Binds of a Broken Heart.

• Artist: Xanthas Silvermoon
• Description: This is the first poem I've written in almost 10 years, so you'll see the rust.
  Be gentle people, I'm a bleeder.
• Date: 12/07/2008
• Tags: binds broken heart

Here I sit, all broken hearted, tried to love, and only started.
And then my love, it failed me fast, and gods only know how long I’ll last.
And though, I know, my heart is true, and all I can say is "I love you,"
Fate is cruel, karma unkind, and my heart keeps me in this bind.
For though I know It must not be, strength of will so I must not see
I wish to only be, the man for one so lovely.
And although I know I am not worthy, by her side I wish to be.
So, here I stay, and here I cry, for no longer should I try.
Until the day she comes to me, forever here, I shall be.

Comments

[-x- Fridge -x-]

Alitare- that's harsh. Who are you to judge if this emotion is not genuine.
Ok, I agree that he needs to work on form and the repetitiveness of the words. But can't you encourage him, more usefully? Yelling about how much he sucks will not make him a better poet.
On that note, I love the fourth line. Not a bad poem!

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

You people make me sick... You confuse emotion with skilled writing, and most of this emotion is not even genuine, or at least not presented s such. I am unimpressed with your pathetic attempt. You used "love, or a form of it" 4 times! and "know" 3 times! This is repetitive garbage, and is so very unimaginative, and weak, and boring, and unoriginal. If I could give it a 0/5, I would! 1/5.

[Your lost angel]

Thats really good and as well it gave out strong emotions good job

[sfnewai]

Such strong emotion caught with the most detailed of words. Great poetry, although deeply sad, it's still great writing.

[kulta_mintlo]

sad That was a good poem. Sad stuff. D:

[Taioh]

=/ Good poem. I think I'm depressed now.