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She laid in the rain with no sight
Love had torn her apart
now cold, distant as so
once a gentle heart
She always was caught up in the rain
never complaining, always hating
but she wanted the boy with the umbrella so badly
to take her out and show her love
So the girl wandered near and far
waiting for true love, the one
but sadly this all ended
with a click of the gun
so heed my warnings
be careful in love
you might just end up
like the girl in the rain.
- Title: Girl in the rain
- Artist: keetilia
- Description: A poem about a girl; and love
- Date: 12/04/2008
- Tags: girl rain
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Comments (5 Comments)
- guardianangel 517 - 04/26/2009
- Wow...that's all I can say. Wow...
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- RainingMusicDawn - 12/30/2008
- great. loved it. srry i can;t give u more feed back i'm bad at this. lol but awesome pem keep writing
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- Nikki4815 - 12/07/2008
- you could make it a bit longer, but you get a 4/5 anyways. I really like how you changed the color, because it draws your attention. I always find it hard to read poems from people who don't even change the alignment or anything. Rate back? My best entry is called "Unspoken Message", and I recently added "Lost in the World"
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- chakalakaconverse - 12/04/2008
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nice
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- Rook219 - 12/04/2008
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It was great ^^
Cept I think you could've expanded it...
Anyways 5/5 - Report As Spam
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