Broken Angel

• Artist: Ainyx
• Description: I came up with this in class :D I liked it. I then decided i wanted to try the Arena. It may be alittle depressing but i like it. I'm trying a small one to see how this goes. If this goes well i'll put more and longer. :P So Please enjoy. I accept pointers etc. But please don't leave mean comments. Well Enjoy my Poem!
• Date: 12/02/2008
• Tags: broken angel

My Wings are broken
No one cares nor sees
I'm a broken angel
No one will help me

I reach for help
But they just walk by
I'm a broken angel
Nobody cares if i die

They shun me away
This world is so cold
I'm a broken angel
I have died alone

Comments

[hot cherries101]

very nice maybe if you made it longer and some different words it would be even better than it already is

[babygurl2795]

Very beautiful poem. I like it. 5/5

¬nyaa...

[Nikki4815]

very good.

[Guma-chan]

I like it. midnight in chanes is right. you could lengthen it a little and use better words. other than that... great poem!

[the_toxic_shockartist]

it's good could be longer and mabe you could use a thesarus and change some more than average words other than that it's great