Snow

• Artist: all590
• Description: This is a poem I had tought of while I was walking home, I thought about snow then this poped up in my mind.
• Date: 12/01/2008
• Tags: snowcolddeath

The snow drifted softly,
down from the sky,
I lay down on the snow,
Wearing a tattered white gown,
I could see my breath,
In the fading sun,
My cheeks were begnning to feel cold-
turning red-
along with my nose,
my eye lids felt heavy-
with each snowflake-
never the same-
that fell on my face,
I closed my heavy eyes,
I could see something in the distance,
but, my mind wandered,
too far away,
So I felt my week spirit,
start to leek from my cold body,
as the snow drifted slowly,
and softly down.

Comments

[gogaboi]

Superb!
I agree with beanielova, as well.
And besides spelling, it was excellent!
:3

[kira-kun senpai]

o really good felt like i could c wat u was talkn about as i read it n my head 5/5 really good job ^.^

[iBrightScales]

I like it.
Though I do agree with beanielova, I still think that it's a beautiful poem.

[beanielova]

Couple of spelling errors, consider using more senses than just your sight and touch. :3