HeartBroken

• Artist: MissTsukiko
• Description: Just wanted to know what you thought....
• Date: 11/25/2008
• Tags: heartbroken

HeartBroken

Crushed Heart
Reaching Out
Trying to get you back
Endless Pain
In My Chest
Collapsing to the ground
Dried Eyes
No More Tears
Sitting in the rain
Emptiness
In My Mind
Forgetting all the pain

Comments

[MiNOKii2]

its kind of boring srry

[MiNOKii2]

i make ammendments!:

when you left
you crushed my heart
so why do i feel love?
reaching out to get you back,
but you just walk above.
i feel no heart inside my chest,
the heart that use to be
contained the love
i felt for you
the love that will never be
my entier body numbing
falling to the ground
the tears that i have wept befor
no longer come around
as the raine begins to fall
the paine has gone away
my mind goes blank
i have no chance
to ever love again

[-RediscoverNami-]

Seems to simple..
Like it took you five seconds to write, like this.. :
I'm broken.
It's not fair, the pain I mean.
I've done nothing wong, form my point of view.
But i'm sure that she's hurt.
Very hurt. Crying.
On the floor of her room.
It was only a kiss.
Or maybe more.
God I'm such a whore.


Obviously, i'm no poet.
But I still think this ne could've been worked on a little more.
3/5.

[Red_Ranger275]

I like it so much! it remind me of me. smile

[xxmisslexirocksxx]

cool