It's Raining

• Artist: Efface
• Description: Now, this piece is something different, something that might make you think. If it does, good. It's supposed to. If you take it for surface value, you're not reading into it enough. Take this poem and tie it to a chair - beat it with a garden hose until there's nothing left (for any of you who got this reference, kudos... have a cookie and call me in the morning). Here's to true poetry.
• Date: 10/18/2008
• Tags: rain

Plop.

That first one was
ignorance.

Plip.

That next one there,
that one was
mindless.

Plip. Plop.

Those,
those were
witless;
imbecilic.

Plop.

This time it was
naïveté.

Next time will be
unconscious;
insensible;
unmindful;
benighted.

This is what happens
when the rain falls unheeded;
unchecked;
unfiltered.

Comments

[Bean Whipped Potato Chip]

It's so true. And it's very you, for sure.
I don't feel so alone starting my writing pieces with onomatopoeia's!
And way to send it to me twice. xD

[Balorio]

I'm no poetry buff, so I don't get it.

And it's early. But it sounds very deep and neat...