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My heart had a might great pain that wasn’t meant to be
And I had no one else to blame but only me
For each time it would beat it bled a great deal
No matter what I did, it simply didn’t heal.
‘Tis be the fate I have.
I can’t ignore this pain anymore
It just hurts too much to be a chore
If will someone just look at me once with a happy grin
My heart would be overjoyed that it would burst
But sadly my fate is that of a curse
This is my future for my life
I’ve been hated and loved
All of it means nothing if my pain like doves,
Doesn’t fly away soon
Then I'm afraid trouble will loom
And that wouldn’t be any good at all.
Because then my life would be like leaves in the fall
And I would descend to the ground below.
It’s all coming to an end right here and now
Turns out there was something I could do, as I take my last bow
Goodbye cruel world as I take a giant leap
Your sure did make me cry in my sleep.
Look at me now, soon to feel no more pain.
The sky is getting farther as the ground gets close,
Let’s give one final toast,
For all the wonderful things I’ve never seen
Darkness becomes me when I smile me last smile.
Memento Mori.
- by Rock Rebellion |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/04/2008 |
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- Title: Memento Mori
- Artist: Rock Rebellion
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Description:
A girl falls to death from a building. However this is what she though before it happen.
Please comment on it, and tell me how I should Improve my writing - Date: 10/04/2008
- Tags: memento mori
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Comments (5 Comments)
- BlackDream12 - 04/07/2010
- This is good! I love your metaphors!
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- Quintopalas - 07/02/2009
- But if your just a begginer this is pretty dang good. :3
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- Quintopalas - 07/02/2009
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Wow.
Pretty Good.
I was listening to if today was your last day
by nickel back while I was reading this and
I hate tears in my eyes. You need more words
stating her pain and how she died. Mattering on how
you want to write it you should proably skip out on the
rhyming. Try finding other words that are umm.. how should I say this, Smarter sounding for the small words such as hate, love, cruel, pain, happiness, etc. But if you just a be - Report As Spam
- Alectix - 06/25/2009
- It kind of throws me off a bit, but then again I can see the type of writing style showing :] The emotion is somewhat convincing, especially in the last 9 lines. I'd suggest a little more words pointing to pessimism or death? It's your choice ^^ 4/5
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- Toxic Playdo - 06/25/2009
- Wow.Very very nice. I love it.
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