Blurry

• Artist: xX F0R3v3R x UnSeeN Xx
• Description: Drinkin party goes wrong
  
• Date: 07/18/2008
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The room is spinning my heart is beating
The keg is empty and no longer teeming
God this night was one to remember
To bad tomorrow I will have a hangover

Wake up the next day right outside the porch
Guess mom and dad found the beer stashed by the tiki torch
The yelling the screaming the headache that feeling
My head is still throbbing and my heart is slow beating

Another night friends come over
Sure we will bring the beer just invite the girls over
Everyone is here just full of cheer
The party starts while mom and dad are near

Sitting in the corner everything blurry
Guess mom and dad came home early
No more parties no more fun
Till next week when your parents are gone

Comments

[xX_MiStReSsOfThENight_Xx]

i get u that happened 2 my bro once

[Crystalinemoon]

Hmm I agree some of your rhymes seem forced But its quite fun to read ^^

[MalicaNeko93]

It is pretty good but I think that the line with the teeming doesn't make sense(when do keg bottle teem? They spill maybe..but not teem..teem means to overflow) and I think the line with the tiki torch sounds forced.....another thing9sorry to nitpick) but I think it would flow better if it was slowly beating instead of slow beating