Emo Thoughts

• Artist: shoopdawhoop345
• Description: I wrote this in my spare time. And please don't think me emo because I'm really not. But I could be.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: emotional dark depressing heartless

I fall into a dark hole I cannot escape.
Was this to be my terrible fate?
I hear screams of panic and sorrow.
Will these tragedies end in a year or tomorrow?
I slit my wrists to ease the pain.
But only to find it's for my own gain.
Love and hatred never combined.
Unless two helpless souls can make them intertwine.
So before I end this poem in utter silence.
Please by any means, exclude and destroy any violence.
-Ezekiel Kallio

Comments

[Fyrewalle]

To my below, nothing is flawless, don't ever say as such. There is always room to improve, nothing is ever finished.

However now regarding to the author, if your going to label this as "emo", please think past the cliche argument of slitting wrists being the only defining point. Also use some grammar and proper poetic devices to help your stanza flow more seamlessly, instead of the sometimes short and long choppy sentences presented here.

A 3/5.

[Atomic Rock]

Love it. To tell you the truth, I always give artists a bit of constructive criticism in my comments. I can't find any criticism to give; flawless. I like how you signed your name.

[Xx-Moonlight97-xX]

yeah this poem isnt relly emo at all and i dont see how you think it is, but i like it ^^

[RobbieHull]

Dude emo is not what you always seem to view it

[Devilish Reminder]

The poem isnt that emo...I mean its well written but its not the general concept. People take the term "emo" and twist it so many ways that it seems no one knows what it really means. 4/5

[Dark_Gale017]

I don't think it sounds that emo. I was never good at rhyming with poems but you did it beautifully. 5/5