Autobiography

• Artist: [Toaster Rape]
• Description: This work is copyrighted. That means it's protected by law. You steal it and I WILL sue you.
  
  Anyway, this work is largely autobiographical (duh). It's one of my favorites that I've ever written.
  
  I have more stuff on my deviantart page.
  www.mekano-san.deviantart.com
• Date: 07/15/2008
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I never heard a Man
sigh
Under his Pack
Yet I groan so
Under mine
(weak!)

I dig my roots
into the sweet
Maternity
and grow
grow

and str
e
t
c
h

hoping to grasp
the azure,
indigo,
teal,
and orange.

to blaspheme
the body,
parading
nude
and ready...

Likewise,
Men lust for me:
My contraband
groans
and delicate flower;

Oh, how i wish
to reveal
and indulge
breaking
my
promise!

but myth
becomes truth
becomes fantasy
and hides
in wisdom

and honesty
always has a place
inside
the dreamer.
Begins

and Ends
on the same note,
same chord;
where y = mx+b,
m is the slope.

And y to amaze,
When x is so
Consistently,
Unpredictably,
Constant?

turning collar
and shooting halos...
revenge! revenge!
for Underestimation,
the price

Look-
Listen-
Hear!
A dove
has fallen.

blood stained its wing
its satchel
undone.
Spoiled,
it cried,

"to arms, to arms!
We must have revenge!"
A Satirical lover
took heed
and ran.

Everlasting,
Everfalling
there is No Stopping
once you've Begun.

Comments

[Astaire]

While the content is certainly interesting and you have some good metaphor, the linebreaks can be a bit jarring at times. Also, the metaphor at times feels a bit disconnected.

Still, your work shows promise.

[Mewok]

i love the math tie in lol

[harpsdesire]

That description just scared me away from commenting.... I'll just say it's interesting.