Radiance

• Artist: s u n n y _ l o t u s
• Description: I was suddenly inspired to write this poem when I was looking at a rose. I made a few changes and this is a free verse poem. Sorry if it's a bit long. Hope you like it! :3
• Date: 06/06/2009
• Tags: radiance

The rose continues to

Shine.

Its red petals

Shimmers under the Sun's continuous

Warmth.

Its beauty,

Undescribed,

But admired by all.

Soon,

Very soon,

Its colors die.

Those petals fall

One

By

One

Gliding across the gracefull wind.

What has become of this rose

Now?

Comments

[Fujiwara Motoo]

Very simple, yet meaningful in a way. Same meaning as any other deep poem though. A free verse poem, not bad. It just doesn't make me all fluttered and I don't connect with it. Ha'z maybe I'm too stupid to comprehend. xD But still I don't really like it. Either way my opinion doesn't matter, nice effort.

[apples795]

Beautiful! * you can hear my fingers snapping*

[Lestiene]

It's a really beautiful poem. But yeah, I agree that the word break is a bit awkward.. But it adds to its beauty anyway. Good job!

[Sanvi]

the whole poem is beautiful and simple. however, the way you put the verses/word break a good part of the reading flow. at least i found it a bit awkward... but I understand the idea behind it.

[-Mak521-]

nice Cap' ! ^__^

[xXkuroi_kisekiXx]

lovely~~

[l-sampaguita-l]

Beautiful poem!!! <3