Outlooks

• Artist: AngeI Flonne
• Description: Okays , here is a poem I wrote on my free time. I just started writing poems recently. This poem is about the outlooks people can have on life. Whether it be positive , neutral or negative. Try not to be too harsh or criticize. I hope you like it >.< (NOTE : laxation is actually a word and that is how it's spelled yet my spell check says other wise o.O)
• Date: 12/08/2008
• Tags: outlooks positivity neutrality negativity

~ There are three outlooks on life

Please look at the bright side
Of course the options are wide
Sure glad that you can stay
It is such a beautiful day
Trust me , it will be fine
I'm certain there will be a sign
Victory sure to come
It will grant a very large sum
Try your best. You'll succeed
You are up to the test. You'll lead

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Normal and somewhat confined
Equality is my dream
Uncommitted , unaligned
Try to avoid either team
Regularly uninvolved
Aloof , by standing and calm
Let's hope things will be resolved
Inactive and not one qualm
True desolation and lone
Yearn for laxation is shown

-

No , we are all going to die
Everyone should not try
Gainsaying , gloomy , impugning
Act not when they're crooning
Too much hope is sure to bring you down
I'm thinking that you'll frown
Vitality does not last long
Inclined to grasp what's wrong
This life of mine is soon to end
Yer my life could amend

~ Your outlooks change but are rife

Comments

[conceptually_concrete]

None. X) Sorry I came across as snobby, for I certainly am not. I was simply attemptive to offer support to a fellow writer.

[AngeI Flonne]

Oh..I thought you were being snobby with me so I got snobby. Reflective personality >.< Sorry ^^; No hard feelings?

[conceptually_concrete]

I didn't mean to offend. I quite liked your poem. I suppose if you choose not to accept criticism it's your decision. I was simply stating my opinion on it. ^_^

[AngeI Flonne]

Furthermore , I REALLY don't accept criticism or anything like that. I have low self-esteem as is and it doesn't need to be lowered with criticism. =/ Lastly , I am not one for "Criticism helps me out" 'cause in reality , it increases the chances of me giving up poetry and being depressed. I like to do things on my own , unless I ask. You're free to rate w/e I just don't like criticism.

[AngeI Flonne]

Err...wordy is good ^^; As long as it makes sense and is on topic , right? I never said I was using that as an excuse I was just stating that I was indeed new to this whole poetry business. (PT 1)

[conceptually_concrete]

It's unusual, and it has structure. I must compliment your use of style. The only criticisms I have are to not get too wordy when writing poems that aren't abstract, and to be more confident in your work. Never try to come up with an excuse for your composition, and accept criticism as people trying to help you succeed.