when it happens

• Artist: angel_lida18
• Description: this poem i wrote when i was in a depressed state as well i have been in a huge conflict with one of my friends.... please rate and comment, no rude or negative comments please and thank you ^_^
• Date: 07/15/2008
• Tags: dark pain stress blood rain

A dreadful day
Full of blood
Everyone is just to gay
I feel like putting them in the mud

The blood falls down
Just like the rain
I can't help but frown
When i see a passing train

This pain that comes and goes
I must be in a daze
So much that i froze
I feel like I'm in a maze

Trying to find my way
Through this crazy mess
Everything goes dull and gray
I start to stress

I need some change
How can i escape?
I feel like a bird in a cage
I need to escape with a black cape

The rain that falls
The sound it makes
Its a sound like if he calls
My soul is what he takes

This day in hell
Is pure black
As they all fell
I walked back

Comments

[Squahilian master]

this was actually an awesome poem
and im usually very critical but i believe you have written a very good piece of poetry

[kannazs]

I Agree with Cyromancy, took me of gaurd. And I think it was an awsome peice of writing.

[Cryomancy]

This poem is strangely depressing with a twist of hope at the end. This one absolutely caught me off guard and took me away in a sea of imagery. I absolutely loved it.