Save Me

• Artist: X-B-Rabbit-X
• Description:
• Date: 06/04/2009
• Tags: saveme

Im scared, theres no one there to hold me tight to tell me its ok. All i have is me and my tears, that hope never fade away. Will no one come and save me or is my prince charming just waiting?.... Im alone, and i bet no one cared. While i fall into my cold, dark abyss and still no one in sight, now i really know, no one truely minds. My world become black and terrifying and my sky become gloomy. The days has turn to night and my sun, the moon. I grasp what little sanity i have left and sit in wait for the best.

Comments

[Heel-Clickin Bojangles]

Constructive Criticism Warning:

Capitalize your I's. It's hard to take a piece seriously without proper grammar. Also- try and come up with your own descriptions for a lack of hope. I'm not saying that this is is a direct copy of anything, obviously, though I can't help but feel I've heard this a thousand times.

Keep it up though- you have potential.

[ThrashMetal_14]

i like it.you talk about your true feelings.*five stars

[Krasharkk Matsuki]

ive read many poems that are too similar to this. it isnt that bad though

[Shadowashes]

Great. Reminds me of New Moon a little. I'm happy I'm not the only one to use the term "ayss"

[Melanie Do]

sweet

[evilangel121234]

nice. : )

[pink Maylin]

why not stand up with your on to feet and fight for your night in shining armor your pince charming thier is only so much u can wait for smile