Captured...

• Artist: Lady Lotus Ravenmoore
• Description: A poem, well something that has been bouncing around my head for a few days now.
• Date: 08/01/2009
• Tags: captured addiction lust devil

I met a devil recently,
a seductive, demon, with an angel's face.
How he creeps in side, gaining control.
His laugh, deep, dark and seductive, shaking the very foundry that is me.
I know I should stop, yet I can't help it, an addiction in a way, wanting him.
Knowing, he will be the end of me.
He knows what he does, finds it entertaining.
A hint of a smile in his voice...
That voice, erotic velvet, deadly all the same.
So that is the devil I met recently, a man with unimaginable power,
everything about him should be illegal.
Careful or he'll capture you too....

Comments

[sparkle_diamond_ii]

it so cooll

[Explode at Will]

Sounds like me, I like.

[proji-chan_thedarkgoddess]

first off..... pertaining to the comment before mine, its a free verse, and doesnt need to rhyme to be a poem so as far as poems go it's good. but!
you have misused the word foundry, and in its place should be the word foundation. so apart from the misuse of that word, as a free verse descriptive poem, it's good. a 4.

[Malachi Kun]

the idea is good but u have to make it more poemly like couse this is like im reading a short story of something happened to u i'll give u a 3

[PH Goonka]

Yeah .w. I don't really like it. Sorry. Very descriptive though.
I give you a 3. .w.

[XxSTARRxFREAKxX]

I love it ;3
i would love to meet this angel face owo

[The Phantom of the Knight]

5/5 am I that demon? o.0