living lies

• Artist: unknow virus sis
• Description: a girl that feel that life sucks and hopes to find something better on the other side of the raindow
  
  i got board so dont think im emo or depressed or sucidal IM NOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
• Date: 07/04/2009
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my world is cold
eveything a lie
am i nothing in ur eyes???
seeing the truth that was nothing but lies
having been hurt
my heart has shattered
my life has died
i lost all hope
living was a lie
till the day i died
now there is nothing left to go by
nothing
now this is good-bye
hope to eye u on the other side

Comments

[Ezekiel Von Debonaire]

That's a type of poetry known as dark poetry
Good one though I saw one flaw the u on the last line.....
But overall is great

[ll Sexual Feeling ll]

hmm, i agree with what some people said a few comments back. you're really good at writing but if you really want to commit you have to be more serious about your grammar and style because that alone can be off putting when people are reading your works. also I didn't quite think the last sentence "hope to eye you on the other side" really did your poem any justice either.

[ninjagirlme]

ok i dont think this is boring! i luv this!! its so great, i love the adjectives, and everything else. dont stop writing.

[khanzaku]

boring

[escreamas]

LOL at the description and it is fine words everyone writes a death poem 1ce in there life even if it is jokingly but it needs a rythem not many people have done that on this site which makes me think if people know what a poem is X_X

[rock_luver24]

i feel that way a lot. please read my poem. its called "The Hurt" and its NOT about being sad or emo or deppressed or anything like that

[Lady Xaio]

i got so board