Glued

• Artist: wwjdforme_cheese
• Description: This poem is about pain and even though time might go on the wounds are still there.
• Date: 01/01/2009
• Tags: glued

Glued

this heart was once whole
having no limitations
no outside convictions
keeping a purity
a inward glow flowed from its arteries
then it’s given away to a person who had no business of so
its smashed with a hammer
stabbed with a dagger
blood flowing from its wounds
the heart finally gets away
glue fills the holes
it seeps through
but doesn’t heal a thing
time goes on
this heart has seen a lot
unspoken memories
sudden devastation
and unseemly joy
the glue starts to chip
fall to the ground
and the heart is left
the blood has stopped
but now it knows things
no longer will it be plopped around like some toy
it will live on
escape those pains of the past
and make the joy last
until the day where it can be whole again...


Hope u like it. plz comment and rate wink god bless <3

Comments

[wwjdforme_cheese]

ok will do..thanks

[He Has No First Name]

Also, it's very cliche and gives little insight on how your'e actually feeling. Yes, you're saying it, but there's no insinsity. Make the reader feel it. I greatly suggest using the OP/L stickies.

[He Has No First Name]

It needs general grammer (i.e. Puncuation, capatilzation...) so you can tell where one thought stops and the other begins otherwise this is just one gigantic run-on. Revise, repost, and I'll give a better crit.

[wwjdforme_cheese]

wow lance...lol. thanks i guess. thankies 2 u casey

[Lance Eura]

Wow reading this poem makes me feel bad D= but its a really good poem, u go cheese!!! =D

[caseycacophobia]

pwetty poem :]
very relateable
me likey biggrin

[wwjdforme_cheese]

thank you very much smile god bless