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tab Officer Daniel McClennel sighed as he slipped into Suit 147 at some expensive hotel. He knew the name, it just wasn’t important at the time.
tab CSI was already taking samples of the blood and grey-pink brain splattered on the wall. Two female bodies slumped on the floor, in front of the king-sized bed, a CSI snapping pictures of the sad scene, not touching either of the guns in the girls' hands, their free hands clasped together.
tab He nudged the girl with long blond hair slightly with his foot. Both were dressed in formal cloths. The blond was in a long black and emerald dress, a halter. The brunette with a slight peridot tint was in a black and red dress, silk with a v-neck and three-quarter sleeves. Both in pearls and diamonds, hair done up in cute twists, some gentle curls escaping the pins, nails black with the other girls accent colors French-tipping them, expensive faux fur coats under them.
tab "It was a suicide." Daniel said to the CSI next to him.
tab "That is for the couriner to decide, detective." Helsa, a CSI, responded tartly.
tab He gave the girl a look and continued looking, before walking to the man in charge.
tab He was a man of forty or so, ten years Daniels senior, with a receding hair line, age lines on the corners of his eyes and mouth.
tab "Eric Vanhaven, I'm Daniel McClennel, I-"
tab "I know who you are detective. The best in your division. I'm honored to have you working this case, with my team." Vanhaven said, holing out his hand. Daniel grasped it firmly and shook it.
tab "Forgive me for saying, under these circumstances, I'm not." Daniel responded quietly, turning to see the crime scene.
tab "So tell me, Detective, you've see their bodies, what do you make of it?" Vanhaven said.
tab "Suicide." Daniel said softly. "I still need to gather and go through the evidence though." He looked back over to the corps, a leather bout book protruding out from under one of the girls.
tab "The girls are Talia, the blond one, and Kali, the brunette. We believe that they were associated with the Russian Mob. Their Boss, or who so we assume, had recently been murdered, had named them his soul heirs."
tab "Its unusual for a mob Boss to name someone unrelated to them their heir. Even more so to have two named heir. They must have been close friends."
tab "He had no family; they had all died in a car bombing a few years back. A few months later, the suspects were found at the bottom of Kirsi Lake. But, yes, the two were like sisters, and he saw them the way he saw his own daughters. He was very found of the two; so the papers say, and why we believe them to be related to the Russian Mob."
tab "Alright." Daniel nodded and closed his tired eyes, rubbing them slightly. "I'll finish here and head home for something to eat."
tab "Knock yourself out." Vanhaven muttered, turning away to answer his cell phone. Daniel crept towards the two girls, pulling on gloves with a sharp "snap". He knelt between the two bodies and carefully picked up the leather bound book. It was deep brown in color, with thin, worn leather straps holding it together. He carefully pulled the ties and opened it. On the inside front cover was two neatly scrawled names "Talia & Kali". He turned to the next page, some written in pen, the other in pencil.
tab tab April 14, 2000, Today is my (Talia’s) Birthday...
- Title: Perfect Freedom
- Artist: Alizabell
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Prologue
Also this was created by not only me but my friend, dark_ryu666 - Date: 05/14/2010
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Miss Adaline - 06/04/2010
- i read this and thought it was a really good begining and yeah the grammar and stuff has no worry right now.. i like how added more then justt to girlss dead they weree related to a mafia so you can use that very wisely in your story make it important smile well anyway it is a good prolouge
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- Alizabell - 05/14/2010
- Yeah well, this is kinda back wards. The actually stories starts out when the girls get the diary at 16-17, and it goes through untill their late 20's, describing their life and why they were lead to commit suicide
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- Yoshi-Youichi - 05/14/2010
- This is a prologue?... doesn't seem like it. Anyway, it needs a few rewrites... the more the merrier
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- Alizabell - 05/14/2010
- My keyboard sticks so its kinda hard ^^'' and this is only a rough draft, Im going to edit it according to comments.
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- iDootsie - 05/14/2010
- Too many misspellings to count. Do learn correct grammar, darling.
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