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Esoteric Vamp? Enigma (E.V.E.)
[SLEEP]
... I found a message in a bottle....
It whispered to me as ice carries over the wind, “What is your darkest wish?"
Without a pause I knew, “Immortality."
...the weight of the world fell upon my shoulders. My senses became heavy as if gravity wanted to crush me for my vanity. The weight was too much to bear and inevitably the world went black... fire and pain was my light now. Clawing at my own flesh was like clawing at the surface ice of a lake you know you cannot escape the depths of. As the waves of pain ebbed and flowed I became aware of her faded whisper once again. " Sav v v e m e O f f e r o d ... dd eee aa pp p …uuUUUUAAAAAGGGHHHHhhhh ……. ttthe t owe rrrsss hhurrrtttt... t h .. .. d r i l sss..." Silence and pain consumed me again. She was in pain as well... I will save you....
[WAKE]
The sunlight kissed my cheek with the warmth of a lover caressing the cheek of the one will have to part with. Birds of all chirps and whistles sang their morning conversations safely above their fears. The earth under my body held me as a mother holds her dying child. As I opened my eyes to the light a rush of wind swept over me. In this morning light the dewy chill saturates my body. I can recall nothing except the whispers echoing in my mind...
A cold whisper escapes my lips with eerie conviction “...gia..."
It didn't feel as though I was saying the name...My neutral starter glam guy coat was in shreds, shoes gone, and a small hairpin sits on my lap. I took what I could salvage... With the tinge of fire and cold subsiding under my skin I started walking...
"I will heal your pain."
[START]
- Title: Esoteric Vamp? Enigma (E.V.E.)
- Artist: Offerod
- Description: Intro to the story of Offerod.
- Date: 02/07/2010
- Tags: esoteric vamp enigma
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Comments (2 Comments)
- xNicotine Kisses - 04/14/2010
- I like it for the most part so far. Not a big fan of the [SLEEP] [WAKE] {START] thing, but that's obviously just a matter of opinion and it's your style. You have a great usage of vocabulary as well as description, which is refreshing and surprisingly hard to come by. I do, however, feel that you are using "..." way too much. There's only a sentence here and there that ends in one period and I just don't know how I feel about it.
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- Alysst De - 02/23/2010
- I liked this very much!
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