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I sat in fear
nothing but fear
I watched my parents fight
their faces full
Tears streaming
they hadn't seen me
sitting on the steps
I watched the words drip like poison
off my mothers lips
we had all seen life and death
phasing past our eyes
now at speed because of just two words
its
over
- by thewolfkidJ |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 06/28/2009 |
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- Title: Divorse
- Artist: thewolfkidJ
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Description:
My parents hadnt divorsed, nor are they currently angry at each other.
I have made many friends who's parents had divorsed, and wanted to take the time and realize how many people's lives had been flipped because of that one word. - Date: 06/28/2009
- Tags: divorse anger hate parents
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Comments (2 Comments)
- thewolfkidJ - 06/28/2009
- i guess it should be choppy because i made it on the top of my head. Thanks for the review ill think of it when i'm writing in the future smile
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- Hiraetha - 06/28/2009
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*divorce
*it's (when you use it for the contraction 'it is', then it should have an apostrophe)
Not bad, but I would have been less blunt and worked out a meter for it, this is very choppy. - Report As Spam