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“And you are...?”
“I don't know”
“What do you mean 'you don't know?'”
“I don't know”
“Don't play dumb with me, boy. I know you know this, so tell me who you are!”
“I told you I don't know what you mean”
“You're name! What is your name?”
There was a silence that echoed the room like glass shattering in an empty hallway. The voice, now infuriated, called back to me in a roar of furry
“TELL ME YOUR NAME!”
Another long pause and a long drawn out sigh of defeat and frustration.
“You are just like the rest of your kind, stupid and ignorant. No matter, I was able to invade your mind this easy, I'll find what I am looking for soon enough.”
The tension in my head faded and I could hear the footsteps of running people. It was slow, almost to slow to be a run. But then again, everything felt slow, as if time itself had slowed down. I took one last look at the man who tried to invade my mind and grinned a little as he looked back. If I was going to die, he was not getting what he wanted. I could not hear the man, but I read his lips well. I didn't need to hear the poison or feel the bite, I could see it in his words:
“I will return for you, boy. This I promise”
The world around me faded to black as my name was called. Names. What are they really? Some people believe that names only give human's meaning, a well rounded purpose to live. I believed that too. However after today, I realized that some names, might be worth killing someone for.
- by Jun the Lifebinder |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 06/10/2009 |
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- Title: Elements of the name
- Artist: Jun the Lifebinder
- Description: This is a story im currently working on, altho i had writers block and had to start over, this is the prolog. Tell what you think, I would also like feedback on how I should carry this story and how to make it better, if needed
- Date: 06/10/2009
- Tags: elements name
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Kandii Gurll - 06/14/2009
- hmm that was well written ^^
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- Paramore2789 - 06/13/2009
- That is very discriptive! I liked the begining, but it got a little original. The conversation at the end was sort of original. I think it will be interesting, and I will definatly be looking into your work. When you continue, you should start not at where you left off on the intro, but the BEGINING. Please look at my work too.
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