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My head shoots up and i leap out of the bed. I was embarssed to run around with my butt hanging out, in front of Lorenzo! I ran down the hall and the rest followed. We ran past doctors, and nurses, sick patiences, and the sad families. I finally saw the Fawcett's and just wanted to fall and cry, killing my teacher, it means no homework, but many sad and mad. I ran faster when i heard another bang! I shrieked and ran out a door. The exit of the building. s**t! I balance myself realizing i almost jumped off the building. I looked back and the rest came. Christina!!! I turned back, and Jarrell came running out holding her. My hero! "I couldnt leave her there. And i was worried. Can one more join?" I smiled and tears warmed my eyes. I walked to him, while i was doing that Maddy was scanning the area. She was looking for ways to get away. She turned to me and pointed. A ramp lead down. Great job! I nodded and we ran down. The man ran out holding an M-16 running to us.
I began to panic. I ran down the ramp as fast as i could. Then i heard it. A gun fire then a scream. It happened so fast. Jarrell was down and the man stood over his body. I saw his life fade away, just watching him die, it was horrible. I did the unexpected. I grabbed the man and threw him off the roof.
Bummer. I watched the man throw his arms up and scream like a girl. Then a huge bang. I didnt bother seeing him on the ground wih a shadow of blood. I went to Jarrell and cried every tear i had. Then again a sudden thing.
I realized im falling down the building, 60ft from the ground. Let me say my last prayers!
- by Maddie Amberton |
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- | Submitted on 05/19/2009 |
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- Title: Was it last chance?
- Artist: Maddie Amberton
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sorry it took me a while so much to do!
Finally i can write it.
Again let me know if there is anything to fix.
Enjoy!
<3Whitney - Date: 05/19/2009
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Milady Amethyst - 06/13/2009
- Hmm... It was a bit confusing. You could have explained a bit more in the beginning. And given a bit more detail. A few mispellings here and there. And the lack of apostrophies. Oh, andanything under a hundred (like the use of 60) should be spelled out. smile
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- Maddie Amberton - 05/31/2009
- well thank you, and you need to read the 1st one to understand this whole series!!
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- Part time Dreamer - 05/30/2009
- didn't really understand it till about halfway but it's pretty good...well it good to my tastes maybe not other people
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