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Name: Kitsune Kimiko Hime*
Age: 19 (14 in flashbacks)
Looks: Long red hair that comes to a loose bun half way down your back and striking green eyes.
Outfit: White Blouse with fishnet underarmor, short black skirt with a red, loose, studded belt with a cross attached, black thigh high stockings and black combat boots.
Born: Village Hidden in the Craters( Due to Volcanic activity)
Rank: Anbu
Personality: Loyal, Caring, a Pyromanic(Uncontrollable urge to set things on fire), and Quiet.
Background: *When you were born your parents named you after Kitsune Hime the famous Kunoichi, so everyone calls you princess.
Your dad infused the Two Tailed Demon Phoenix in you(will be explained).
Start~
Flashback ( your pov)
Dad, please, infuse the Phoenix in me. No one else would be willing to sacrific themselves for the good of the village, that and the next newborn baby won't be born for another three weeks.
"No, I won't infuse my own daughter with that monster. What would your mother think of me once I die?"
But dad, it is my body. I think it should be my choice if I am damned for as long as I live.
"Fine, but be ready, and remember no one must know the demon is housed inside of you or your life may be on the line."
End Flashback
You called for me lord Akaikaga?
"Ah, yes, Kimiko-hime, I asked for your presence to discuss the means of your next mission. As you know, our village has resently underwent bombardment by a member of the Akatsuki. It seems that they nolonger find our village a threat due to all the damage, and has moved on to the village nearby.*pauses* Your mission is to go to that village as a " tourist" and spy on the Akatsuki member in question, follow him if he leaves and try to locate the whereabouts of their hideout. You have a month to find their hiding place. By your standards you won't need even that. So if you don't come back by then, I will assume the worst. Understand?"
Yes, Akaikaga. I will leave first thing.
"Very well. You're dismissed."
Hai! * Salutes*
Next Day
*talking to self*
Kunai- check
Shurikin- check
Medicine-check
Okay, everything seems to be in place. Best head off .
*grabs an apple and heads out*
FF 2 hours
"Halt! What is your business here?"
I'm here visiting a sick friend.
"Very well you may enter."
In Village
' Hmm wonder where I might find that Akatsuki bomber? Might as well have a look around.'
Hour Later
*sighs* Still no sign of the guy. - -'
" Oh no! He's back!"
Hmm??
"KATSU!"
boom Boom BOOM!
" AHHHHHH!"
'WHAT WAS THAT!'
"Katsu"
Boom!
Ah! *dodges bomb*
"Katsu"
boom Boom BOOM!
*continues to dodge*
'who's aimming for me!?'
"Hey, UN! Quite moving, yeah!"
"Katsu"
boom!
*dodges**looks up*
you see a girl with blonde hair wearing a black cloak with red clouds on it riding on a massive bird
'i thought the bomber was a guy? hmm guess not'
Who are you and why are you trying to blow me up!? you yell.
"none of your business, yeah! Now hold still, un"
No!
you pull out a few kunai and wrap explosive tags around them.
You throw them at the chick while avoiding the bombs coming at you.
three of the five kunai get, stuck in the bird's beak?
the tags explode and send the girl flying staight at you.
no ones pov
you hit your head on a rock
after a few seconds you open your eyes to find her on you. you try to get her off of you when...
your pov
i..itai...* lifts head slightly and rubs head*
'huh??'
*opens eyes*
Ah!'great my own explosives landed her on me.' - -'
'how to get her off...'
*sits up as far as possible and starts to lift her off*
you feel something press up against your leg
'hmm...? what is that?'
*screams* OMG SHE IS A HE!!
- by lady_bug_528 |
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- | Submitted on 02/19/2009 |
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- Title: untitled
- Artist: lady_bug_528
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Description:
I haven't come up with a name yet.
I am writing a love fanfic story between Deidara and Kitsune
I am have troubles coming up with the next part.
Feel free to give suggestions
Rate and Comment. - Date: 02/19/2009
- Tags: lovestory fanfiction deidara akatsuki
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Comments (4 Comments)
- TheAlmightyGlowCloud - 07/03/2009
- i luv it !!!
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- dee32693 - 02/23/2009
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be the reader? If so then that's pretty cool. I read something like this before but that was once and in a published book. Anyway, it'd be cool to see where you're going.
3/5 for catching my interest! =D - Report As Spam
- dee32693 - 02/23/2009
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Well this definitely needs some work. The grammar and punctuation aren't too bad bad but they can be better. You kinda need to elaborate on what's going on. Just saying boom isn't giving me a mental picture on what's happening. For example, it could be coming from the side, the top, the bottom or anywhere. And just saying that the person is "In Village" is confusing. It'd help for you to explain parts of the setting as well.
Another thing is the "You' you are talking about. Is this supposed to - Report As Spam
- -Deathly Destruction- - 02/23/2009
- This....is Naruto mixed with nonsense. Also, refrain from using words from a foreign language in your writing unless they're words that have become a globally recognized part of the language- i.e. resumée, cart blanc, kamikaze, ebony, etc. You alienate readers when you could be using the english equivalent which works just fine, too.
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