singing with roxas

• Artist: captain sora29
• Description: a 15 year old boy sings with a 13 year old girl, together they win a
  contest and the girl (kayla martins) wins the contest and earns money to
  pay for her sick mother, and the boy(Roxas chimes) lives a happy live with
  the girl.
• Date: 02/14/2009
• Tags: singing with roxas

SINGING WITH ROXAS

"Kayla!!" Roxas ran toward the girl. "Guess what?" "Umm..your finally
smart?" "Noooo silly." "Look, you know how theres a school singing
contest i'm joining in it!" "Oh really, what reward do you even get?"
"Ummm..money?" "Roxas, for real." "I'm serious, why do you need
money, and i thought your mom is in the hospital." "Well she..is."
"Then earn some money for her medication." "Well, i guess i could."
"Thats the spirit!" Said Roxas. "Well i'll see you tonight." "WHAT!"
"It's tonight?" "Ummm, yeah, didn't you know that?" Said roxas.
"No!" "Roxas i'm too shy,nervious, and new at that school." "I can't
sing without messing up." "Don't worry, i'll be singing with you."
"What?" Kayla looked up in amazment. But Roxas wasn't there.
"Where did he go?" "Well, i'm not going to sing i guess." The next day Roxas ran by kayla and pulled her to a big building to the north. "Look
up now kayla." "Whoa kayla looked up in surprisedful amazment.
"Well, we gonna sing or what?" "I..I..I can't." "Why, i'm here with you."
"Well i'm going to mess up." Kayla looked down worried. "Roxas." "Please?"
"Well..............ok." "YES!" The two ran inside the building.
" redface do i have to go?" "For me Kayla." "Ok." Then they jumped up on the stage and grabbed a microphone and the music began.

The moonlight was strong, so come on everyone lets sing along.
we will be sure to keep it straight, oh yeah every one likes to date.
We can whip up the cream cause anything is possible in a dream.
If this isn't right then dude you missed the other flight. lets jump in the
game, you know my name. we can play our imagination, It's your creation.
only if you have the nation............The song was over and everyone went home. "Roxas." "Yeah?" "You were the best!" "Thanks you were good too."
"Really, you thought so." "Now i can pay for my mom!" Said kayla.
"Good night Roxas." "Night kayla." "I'll see you and you're mom at the
hostpital tomarrow." "OK Roxas."

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Comments

[Delilah Sun-Walker]

It's a good story. However, it has TOO many grammatical errors, and you definately need to fix that punctuation. For instance, when you said, "whoa kayla looked up in suprisedful amazement, You really need to have said, "Whoa," said Kayla, looking up in suprised amazement." Because you missed the capitals, punctuation and "Suprisedful"? I am pretty sure that's not a word.
Anyway, I do like the story. 3/5.

[meerodi]

umm... it was kinda hard to tell who was talking when.

[captain sora29]

this story could be fiction but they could be real people.