Darius's Diary - SakidoPg3

• Artist: DarklingJunior
• Description: The third page of Darius's Diary when he meets a young demon named Sakido
  Darius's Diary - Sakido Pg3: An Army of Bodies
• Date: 12/16/2008
• Tags: darius diary sakidopg3

It was a horrifying sight. There were bloody corpses strewn all over the place.
What disturbed me the most was the number of dead Demon children.
Similar attacks had been carried out by Demons on Heaven.
Angels young and old had been slain by the soldiers of Hell. My own parents were killed in the war.
Even knowing that, the sight of all the young Demons' corpses still shook me.
Although they were Demons, they were stil children.
It wasn't right to slaughter them like this.
I buried all the bodies, Demon ang Angel alike.
Since I used my earth magic, it didn't take long.
Among them was an adult wind Demon that matched Sakido's discription of her mother...
...her only known family...

Comments

[DissidiaRequiem]

Some minor grammatical and spelling errors. Good subject material and a good base, don't get me wrong! There's room for improvement, especially on sentence structure. The train of thought seems kind of disjointed, I don't know if that was on purpose or not. Don't give up though, I'd love to see how you improve.

[Tiziyon]

O_O uhhhh huh ummmm good discription but, I kind of......ummm yeah