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I was a vampire, an animal ranting and raging with blood red eyes. I was a menace, and I did not want to bear this pain that was harbored inside of me! Why was I the sufferer of this madness, this plague?! Alone, wretched, and with no family left to call my own, I stood in the torrent of rain, tears streaming silently down my face. It had all seemed so perfect! What lay behind an innocent facade was a bitter and cruel revenge.
A voice called suddenly to me from the lights of a house that was nearest the woods. "Hello? Is someone there? Hello? Do you need help?" A bright shaft of light pierced the shadowy eaves among the trees where I was hidden. "No," I breathed under my breath, "No! Stay away!" His blood hummed and my throat blazed with an unwanted thirst.
I longed for the human blood with an angry passion, but still had enough of my reason left within me to know that it would be wrong to take an innocent life. I loathed myself and wished I could end it all. Crazed as I was, I did not want to hurt an innocent life as I had been hurt. I crouched in the dark shadows and tensed, ready to spring away should the human choose to investigate further. The human moved closer, sweeping the light in a broad range over the area where I was hiding, and as I darted past I snarled to frighten her or him away.
I lunged into the safety of the woods and ran effortlessly through the thicket until my head was slightly cleared. The storm's fury overhead increased, and the wind and pounding downpour streamed through my hair. I did not care who I was, where I came from, or how I was made. I only wanted to be left alone, bloodthirsty and homeless, sad, and lonely.
- by SilverMoon55453 |
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- | Submitted on 11/29/2008 |
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- Title: VAMPIRESS
- Artist: SilverMoon55453
- Description: read this! I have more (15 pages more DX) of this particular book I am writing. I would like comments, so ppl who read this, please feel free to comment! I want to know who likes my writings....
- Date: 11/29/2008
- Tags: vampiress
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Comments (7 Comments)
- lady zarinthia - 06/24/2009
- I like it but I suggest you lead up to saying you're a vampire. I think you confused present and past tense. Other than that it's really good.
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- Tavril - 04/14/2009
- it was preety good
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- alainlalaland - 04/14/2009
- Oooh, I like it, BUT, it was a bit blunt. Lead up to the exposition more before you just jump in full swing. The writing style is fantastic though! Keep me posted!
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- The_Amazing_Yuuki - 03/18/2009
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that was a bad start, sorry. It was too out there. make them find out what you are before blurting it.
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- YouFailedSoIHacked - 01/16/2009
- my new account is this one to any of my friends... I got hacked.... T.T so its xxx_ariali_xxx if anyone wants to read my stories...
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- xangelofdreamsx - 11/29/2008
- gooody!!! biggrin
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- Avulira - 11/29/2008
- You don't seem to understand the difference between past and present tense. Go over it and check through it. You got off to a really bad start, besides to many people write vampire stories that they get really boring. This did nothing for me.
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