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kiba:damn where are they
-running-
kiba:il give then five more minutes
-running-
sakura surprised k im here
kiba:finaLLY
sakura:sorry im a bir late
kiba:try two hours
sakura surprised h opps sorry
kiba:its ok
sakura:hey where is obito and kira
-runs into kiba-
kiba:found obito owwwwwwwwww
obito surprised ww sorry kiba
kira:i told you not to run
obito:ya i know
kiba:k....kira
kira:hey little bro its bin three years
kiba:y..ya its bin three years since we all saw each other in a group
sakura:ya
obito:ya me and kira left for training
sakura:i stayed and got more traing from tsunade
kira:ive bin watching this guy get stronger
kiba:and ive bin here running the anbu
obito:wow running the anbu
kira surprised bito kiba was that befor we all left
obito surprised h realy
kiba:gahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
sakura:im going to make a cake to celebrate us all being here
kiba:cool
kira:yaya
obito:yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
sakura surprised k come to my house in an hour
obito surprised k
kira:yaya
sakura:hey where didi kiba go
-running-
kiba:see ya in an hour got to get some stuff ok cya
sakura surprised h ok
obito:um cya
sakura:huh where you going
kira:we havent bin here for three years we got to catch up
obito:what she said
sakura surprised h ok cya
kiba:got away
sakura:away from who
kiba:ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
kiba:sakura what the heck
kiba:did you follow me
sakura:no my house is rite over there
kiba surprised h
kiba:well cya
sakura surprised k
-walks-
kira:i wonder what kibas doing
obito:i dont know
kira:knowing kiba he is probably eating some dumplings
-eats-
kiba:man i love dumplings
kiba surprised ne cup of tea please
waiter surprised k
-gives tea-
kiba:thank you
obito:kiba
kiba surprised bito
kira:see i told ya
obito:grr
kiba told him what
obito surprised h nothing
kiba surprised k
kiba:got to run cya
-runs-
kiba surprised k im here
-goes in to store-
kiba:hello
servece girl:hello
kiba:um id like a cherry blossem neckles
-gives-
servece girl:that will be 10000ryo
kiba:uh
-gives money-
kiba:that was all my money
-crys-
kiba:well she deserves it still
kira:what the
obito:uh why are we spying
kira:i want to thats why
obito surprised k then
kiba:damn i have b minutes ok i know sakura is bakeing the cake not at her house ok good
kiba:hey obito kira come out i know your there
kira:uh
obito:we wer caught
kiba:doesnt matter just follow me
kira surprised k
obito:fine
-runs-
-opens door to sakuras house-
obito;what we doing here
kira:ya
kiba:just get down ok
kiba:shhhhhhh she comeing in
-opens door-
kiba:suprise
tsunade:suprise
ino:suprise
shikamaru:suprise
doug:suprise
cherry:suprise
choji:suprise
temari:suprise
garra:suprise
naruto:suprise
kankuro:suprise
konata:suprise
dark:suprise
kiba:happy birthday sakura
-kisses-
sakura:uh
-blushes-
kiba:heres your gift
-gives gift-
sakura:thank you
-opens-
sakura:Oh my god this is what i wanted but it cost to much
sakura:kiba you baought me this
kiba:ya i did
sakura:thank you kiba i love you
kiba:i love you to
-kisses-
- by xXikuto_tsukiyomiXx |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 07/30/2008 |
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- Title: Darkness and four old friends
- Artist: xXikuto_tsukiyomiXx
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Description:
this story takes place in konaha villege and it has me and my best friends basicly fighting evil and haveing a normal teenage life.there is action,love.romance,adventure, and manymore this story is also writen in chapter's this is chapter one enjoy
this book is baset from real people on gaia - Date: 07/30/2008
- Tags: darkness
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Kavvana - 03/18/2009
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*continued* You might want to get rid of the emoticons as well...
Work on your spelling and grammar as well. The lack of capitalization is slightly bothersome as well, but you'll evolve and become better. Keep writing! It's a great form of art and no matter how you go about it, it's wonderful to see people writing. - Report As Spam
- Kavvana - 03/18/2009
- I'm not a fan of this style of writing... It's like you're writing for a play, except you can't really tell what the inflection or tone of voice is, or what's going on with their facial expressions. Make sure to punctuate properly since you didn't express the tone, so that we as the readers can better understand how it is being said (is it a question? Are they exclaiming something? Is it a statement?).
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- TheLoveCompound - 02/22/2009
- I like cinnamon buns..... :p i really doooooooo
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- shuukaaku - 01/18/2009
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... it makes no sense
and u have very very very very bad spelling sad - Report As Spam
- Mystjerne - 12/13/2008
- Maybe you should not make everyone(almost)Say surprise.it's arkward
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